3.6 Apply Techniques F3, F4 and F5 to improve flow between linked paragraphs
Note in the following example how the Authors explicitly tell you what’s the connection between the two paragraphs (bolded). This saves you from having to think too hard as you read the text.
Variation of the eGFR was tested against the intake of dietary food groups while controlling for relevant clinical parameters, notably the participant’s age and BMI, as well as blood plasma levels of glucose and triglycerides. We found that eGFR was very strongly associated with age, as well as the consumption of sweets, which are rich in sucrose and other sugars (Figure 7C). Thus, the consumption of high-sugar-containing food explains variations in renal function in our human cohort.
To obtain further insight into the association between diet and renal function, we derived the molecular composition of all food items consumed, and observed that sugars, but interestingly, not dietary purines, were associated with eGFR (Figure 7D). Dietary sugar intake by many study participants could mainly be linked to the consumption of sweets and fruits; whereas for some individuals, total dietary sugars were almost exclusively derived from soft drinks or juices (Figure S7C). Milk products, likely due to lactose content, and other food groups contributed only moderately to the total sugar intake of individual diets (Figure S7C).
van Dam E et al Cell Metabolism 2020 Sugar-induced obesity and insulin resistance are uncoupled from shortened survival in Drosophila
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Even if you took a micro-sleep between reading the two paragraphs, you’d quickly remember what the text was about by reading the first 12 words of the second paragraph (it could have been shortened to 9 words, as per Technique F4, link to preceding text within the first 9 words of a sentence).